Oh Say, Can You See?

26 Aug

I can see you
13 rivers red blood brothers
13 pillars victorious mothers

blue promises in the night sky
your stars shining as they guide

give me liberty, give me life
bless the fruit of our strife

o majesty, wave your banner over us
bless our battles in the dust

your colors dipped in God we trust
I can see you, I will be you
wave, wave, wave


12 Responses to “Oh Say, Can You See?”

  1. claudia August 26, 2015 at 11:27 pm #

    i don’t think i get the 13 rivers and pillars reference here as my knowledge of the american history is not deep enough – i hear you on what you say about freedom – becomes more and more meaning with what happens in the world right now


    • lupitatucker August 26, 2015 at 11:33 pm #

      the 13 rivers are the red stripes, and the 13 pillars are the white stripes, which in the flag stand for the original 13 colonies of the United states.

      Liked by 1 person

  2. katiemiafrederick August 26, 2015 at 11:33 pm #

    it’s not
    enough to
    wave the flag
    we can be the
    Freedom’s Ringing
    sound shores our sand
    eYes of Ocean Blues..:)

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Sumana Roy August 27, 2015 at 7:02 am #

    I second katiemiafrederick….


  4. X August 27, 2015 at 7:04 am #

    Great opening lines . I love the symbolism you give eAch element of the flag. The end is sharp too. I will be you. Maybe we can live up to our anthems.


  5. Glenn Buttkus August 27, 2015 at 9:12 am #

    Incredible poem–too bad you posted a bit late, or it would have had 25+ more raves. I like the way you boldly rhyme just off kilter, but bang on. Very interesting take–the ensign not the lyrics of the anthem as most of us did. I love the lines /o majesty, wave your banner over us/our battles in the dust/.


  6. Myrna August 27, 2015 at 11:55 am #

    I like your type of patriotism – be the flag. What a lovely anthem you’ve written.


  7. Grace August 27, 2015 at 7:32 pm #

    I specially admire these lines:

    13 rivers red blood brothers
    13 pillars victorious mothers

    A terrific response ~


  8. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) August 27, 2015 at 9:14 pm #

    Well said; nice to get the positive slant too. (Couldn’t get linky right; mine is here: ttp://passionatecrone.blogspot.com.au/2015/08/who-come-waltzing-matilda-with-me.html)


  9. Ayala August 30, 2015 at 5:08 pm #

    A cool write.


  10. Victoria C. Slotto September 8, 2015 at 2:38 pm #

    Oh this is stunning, Lupita–gave me chills. And it also made me think of the 13 clan mothers in the tradition of the Southwest American Indians–interesting how that all merges.


  11. othermary September 10, 2015 at 11:49 pm #

    I too like the imagery you have paired with the flag’s stripes and colors. I hope we can help our country be its best, as you have described here.


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