Paint by Numbers

19 Aug

1 mighty ocean
3 million grains of sand
11 towels dotting the shoreline
30 feet from the lifeguard stand

2 lifeguards, gabbing
1 expectant mother, resting
2 prayers said for husband at
1 interview that morning

1 brand new cell phone
15 times checked
0 calls or messages
from 1 husband, delayed

1 engine roaring
8 beeps while backing up
2 tires crunching
2 victims, surviving

1 mighty ocean
3 million grains of sand
11 witnesses, yelling
1 ambulance, wailing
all prayers, answered.

My lifeguard stand.

My lifeguard stand.

15 Responses to “Paint by Numbers”

  1. brian miller August 30, 2014 at 12:16 pm #

    dang. what a tale eh….i love how you used the numbers to tell the tale too…imagining her finding out…its heartbreaking to think about..especially in light of that new life inside her…


  2. claudia August 30, 2014 at 12:19 pm #

    oh heck… glad about that good ending…. what a story.. and even more gripping after reading that was real…


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 30, 2014 at 12:25 pm #

    What a devastating tale.. And it’s all down to those numbers isn’t it? Glad to see you it’s been a while


  4. Grace August 30, 2014 at 12:29 pm #

    I love the use of numbers to tell a story ~ I am glad all the prayers are answered in the end ~ Hope you are well ~


  5. katiemiafrederick August 30, 2014 at 1:08 pm #

    i use photography as a tool for mindful awareness..counting the details of beauty and life is also a great way to do this as well i think…

    Oh and i love numbers ‘true’..

    as ancient
    time itself


  6. Mary August 30, 2014 at 1:46 pm #

    Wow, just wow! You really had me reading faster and faster as I went through your poem. I really like the way you wrote it….with the numbers, the short lines, the way they were all related, and then the happy ending!


  7. Gabriella August 30, 2014 at 1:59 pm #

    Great use of numbers at the beginning of each line as well as the repetition with some twists at the end. You created tension and then allowed relief in a very effective manner.


  8. Steve Shultz August 30, 2014 at 2:10 pm #

    I like the way you use the numbers. Very cool poem!


  9. arushiahuja August 30, 2014 at 2:22 pm #

    thank God all prayers were answered!! this is a really innovative one!


  10. Poet Laundry August 30, 2014 at 3:20 pm #

    Excellent. Love the way you did this.


  11. hypercryptical August 30, 2014 at 5:41 pm #

    Glad your prayers were answered.
    Anna :o]


  12. Sumana Roy August 31, 2014 at 3:16 am #

    wow…that’s a novel approach and how numbers speak !!…”all prayers answered”..nothing could be as soothing and as miraculous as this…beautiful….


  13. ayala August 31, 2014 at 7:38 am #

    Quite a tale, I am happy you are okay.


  14. Nara Malone September 1, 2014 at 6:13 pm #

    So creative and riveting. Loved the number painting.


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