1 mighty ocean
3 million grains of sand
11 towels dotting the shoreline
30 feet from the lifeguard stand
2 lifeguards, gabbing
1 expectant mother, resting
2 prayers said for husband at
1 interview that morning
1 brand new cell phone
15 times checked
0 calls or messages
from 1 husband, delayed
1 engine roaring
8 beeps while backing up
2 tires crunching
2 victims, surviving
1 mighty ocean
3 million grains of sand
11 witnesses, yelling
1 ambulance, wailing
all prayers, answered.
dang. what a tale eh….i love how you used the numbers to tell the tale too…imagining her finding out…its heartbreaking to think about..especially in light of that new life inside her…
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That was me!
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oh heck… glad about that good ending…. what a story.. and even more gripping after reading that was real…
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What a devastating tale.. And it’s all down to those numbers isn’t it? Glad to see you it’s been a while
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I love the use of numbers to tell a story ~ I am glad all the prayers are answered in the end ~ Hope you are well ~
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i use photography as a tool for mindful awareness..counting the details of beauty and life is also a great way to do this as well i think…
Oh and i love numbers ‘true’..
as ancient
as
time itself
now..
true.
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Wow, just wow! You really had me reading faster and faster as I went through your poem. I really like the way you wrote it….with the numbers, the short lines, the way they were all related, and then the happy ending!
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Great use of numbers at the beginning of each line as well as the repetition with some twists at the end. You created tension and then allowed relief in a very effective manner.
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I like the way you use the numbers. Very cool poem!
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thank God all prayers were answered!! this is a really innovative one!
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Excellent. Love the way you did this.
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Excellent.
Glad your prayers were answered.
Anna :o]
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wow…that’s a novel approach and how numbers speak !!…”all prayers answered”..nothing could be as soothing and as miraculous as this…beautiful….
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Quite a tale, I am happy you are okay.
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So creative and riveting. Loved the number painting.
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